Thursday, December 11, 2008

Rain




Her bags were packed. She didn't know what was left for her here. Everything had come crashing down like the heavy rain . Nothing was the same any more. Her whole world that she believed in had come crashing down on her. She just had to move away from this place. "I should probably call up Alice ( her childhood friend ) once I reach London and ask if I could crash at her place. For how long.. Well nothing's planned and neither was this ".

As soon as Rachel reached London she called Alice who told her to come over to her's with out even any seconds thought.

Alice was really worried about Rachel .When she saw Rachel at her door step she was completely shattered . She still remembered her friend who was always so lively , the life of every party.Now hardly anyone knew if she was in the same room. She was just a ghost of her old self , so dull so lifeless. The laughter had gone away completely just sadness in her eyes. Something had seriously gone wrong in her friends life and she wanted to know what it was. But Rachel didn't wanna talk about it yet. What had gone so wrong that made her change so much?
And she even started hating rain. The gurl who loved to play in the rain , used to find excuses to play and run around the country side was just avoiding it. She just couldn't figure out what happened.


As months went by. Alice starts to sees the glimpses of old Rachel now and again . The occasional laughter , the chatter. Rachel had even got a job in a reputed fashion company. Things were seeming to settle down. And then it was all ruined ..

It had started to rain again..


PS: It's my first attempt to write a short story for the Writer's Lounge. Posting it here before I go ahead and put it up there :) Do let me know your views :)

42 comments:

Keshi said...

WOW I didnt know Ani cud write stories so well. I really loved it I read every word of this post, I swear! U give life to characters and express details of feelings so well. I think u should continue to write babez.


**She was just a ghost of her old self , so dull so lifeless

I cud relate to that somehow.


Keshi.

The Lover said...

nice story. what really happened wid rachel?

Ani said...

Keshi

hehe thanks babez.. was tryin my hand at it.. :)

Ani said...

The lover..

Well I don't know exactly..
hehe this was just random thoughts.. thats about it.. guess need to think of something for what exactly happened..

WarmSunshine said...

A nice attempt dear :)

Ya I have the same question... what did happen to Rachel?

it's got a sweet tone to it :)

Anurag said...

That's a really nice attempt Ani ....
I liked it

vinay said...

:)

MultiMenon said...

I am jus WOWIFIED!!das d way to go ani--go ahead with it at WL..

cheers.. :)

Ani said...

Mehreen ,

hehe i am trying to figure out whats happened to Rachel..

thank u dear..

Ani said...

Anurag,

Thank u :)

Ani said...

Vinay

Thank u.. and welcome to my blog :)

Ani said...

Multimenon,

Thank u thank u :)

vinay said...

just noticed...malayali analle..!!im in tvpm now...enjoying the best things of being at home..:)

Rajesh said...

I go with Keshi....never thot u write stories this well..

M jus thinking of coming up wit a good one and I already have a tough competitor in U :) :)

Still thinking said...

A good piece Ani :)
Keep writing and I'm sure I'll have so much more to say and retrospect on :D

I'm still thinking about the end. It's like making me draw my own conclusion, was that your intention? I have to say the end was intriguing...

RiverSoul said...

A really nice attempt.
Really liked this story. Though i wanted to know exactly what shattered rachel's life...
Its Gr8.
:)

Ani said...

Vinay

hehe adde adde.. what gave me away??? ohh cool.. thts my native as well.. oh well miss home.. but am happy here so.. its ok i guess :)

Ani said...

Rajesh..

hehe u r a charmer arent u.. hehe this is really my first attempt in writing one.. so thank u for supporting me.. and well hehe readin my story out..

and am sure u'll be fine.. coz i am not competing against u dumbo :)

Ani said...

Still thinking..

hehe thank u.. well first attempt so lets see :)

hehe even i'm thinking wht happened to her.. oh well.. hopefully we can find out soon..

Ani said...

Riversoul..

thank u..

well i am still tryin to find out what happened to her.. when i do know.. will surely pass it on to u as well :)

Rajesh said...

Ani...the Name spells TERROR...

Pera Ketta odane Chumme Adhurudhu laaaa

(Thalaivar in Sivaji)

Lol...jus kidding...m yet to start work on 'RAIN'... :)

Ani said...

Rajesh..

U r a charmer.. hehe dumbo.. N no my name doesnt spell Terror.. your's certainly does have a ring to it.. lol

N man i love rajini.. he is the superstar :) cant wait for his next movie.. especially the animated one :)

Talking To My Soul said...

Heyy Ani,

Hi. My first time here. Everybody above me - probably down below too - wanted to know about Rachel. What's bothering me is what about the rains?

What's it about rains that.......


Well begun, someone said, is half done.

*cheers*

Kartz said...

Hmmm... Pretty intriguing; must say!

Good luck with the contest.

Peace.

---
Lo and behold! I am a member there too. ;)

PS: Boo! Following you!

Femin Susan said...

Hi………
Absolutely fantastic post! Good job!
Great! Keep writing…….
Good week……… You are Welcomed to my blog…….

Still thinking said...

Curiosity could well kill me now! :)

Anu said...

hmmm.. my mind is tripping over itself wondering what Rachel went through...waiting for the sequel

The Seeker said...

Hye liked it! the flow was good and what happened to rachel

Kartz said...

Something awaits your ladyship here...

http://kartzonline.blogspot.com/2008/12/award_16.html

Lena said...

you described the change really well.. i mean even without knowing the old Rachel, the reader feels like comforting her and helping her to get back to life... but the end is somehow sad :(

Ani said...

Sorry for the late replies all

Talking to my soul..

Thank you and welcome to my blog.. I know I it is a bit incomplete.. hopefully i can end it well..

Hope you will keep dropping by..

Ani said...

Kartz

yaaaayy.. you should also write one.. if you have written already then will catch up..

and thank u.. :)

Ani said...

Femin Susan..

Thank you and Welcome to my blog.. and surely will pass by yours..

Ani said...

Still Thinking..

Am sorry but I am still trying to figure it out.. :)

Ani said...

Anu

Thank you and will surely try to complete the story soon.. :)

Ani said...

Barath

thank you.. will try to complete the story soon :)

Ani said...

Kartz

thank u dear.. that was really sweet of you .. thank u :)

Ani said...

Lena

I still haven't found a proper ending.. its still a bit incomplete.. hopefully i can complete it soon..

n thank you :)

Anonymous said...

what does 'ab imo pectore' mean?

Preeti said...

Continue karo re...i dont like to be left to think! :P

Cess said...

nice story sweetie!!!!!!!
hope u had a great Xmas and i wish u an excellent end of the year.
tc
C.

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